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© J Hardy Carroll
Infinite Circle
Childhood sweethearts. That’s what people call us.
Adam and I sat together at school, walked home together.
We even had the same friends, though nowadays Margaret works for a London marketing company and Paul manages a five-star hotel in Singapore.
Adam inherited his father’s building firm, so he couldn’t leave. I planned on going to university. But Adam said he loved me so much he couldn’t bear for me to move away.
He’s still as charming as ever. In public.
And I still smile. In public.
Childhood sweethearts. That’s what people call us.
Was there ever a time when I could have walked away?
©Siobhán McNamara
Beautifully understated
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Thank you Neil
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Dear Siobhán,
Subtle, yet oh so very powerful.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle, I was aiming for subtle but there is always the fear that it is too subtle!
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She probably still could but it would be harder. She should have gone to university.
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A missed opportunity for her for sure
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I’m sure there are many who reach this point in life. Nicely expressed.
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Thank you Iain
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Subtly written. You roll up the storm clouds almost unnoticed, and catch us in a deluge of icy rain. What a bleak conclusion.
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Thank you for your considered comment Penny, that’s what I was aiming for, though you can’t be sure it works until someone else sees it!
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Trapped. Ther are such bleak undertones in your words. Excellent.
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Thank you Keith
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Cleverly done and very sad too.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Why is my comment still awaiting moderation, I wonder?
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you for reading and for your comment Susan
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Subtle and layered. Loved the voice.
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Thank you Sandra
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I’m an optimist. If people still call them sweethearts they can’t be fighting like cats and dogs, so maybe there’s still hope to kindle a new blaze in the old fireplace.
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I have a feeling these two are too far gone, though I love your optimism!
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Woah! What a powerful ending. Absolutely loved it.
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Thank you!
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Sweethearts to all, but who knows what goes on behind closed doors? Nice one!
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Thank you, who knows indeed!
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The reader is enticed with the story not told here. Excellent as always.
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Thank you!
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Oh, please–walk away RIGHT NOW!
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I hope she will, but I fear their lives have become so entwined that she can’t see a way out
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The keeping up of appearance is the worst thing really… Big sunglasses is a clear sign… hope she can leave still
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My first draft of this story had the sunglasses. I’m glad the idea still came across
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Living a pretend life… how terribly sad.
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Very sad, and lives can become so entwined that is hard for people to even imagine life outside the relationship
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So true….
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The time is now. Nice story, I liked the way you slyly led into the truth.
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Thank you Ted
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Mixed emotions here. This is a heart breaker story Siobhan.
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It is a reality for too many people. Thanks for your comment 🙂
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Wow. That hits hard. Well done. :o)
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Thank you!
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This is so very well done. Have you been gone for awhile? Or have I just missed your posts? Thanks for the heartache of this ~ I meant that.
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Thank you! I haven’t been on Friday Fictioneers for a while, I’ve just been too busy but I always feel the tug of it on a Wednesday morning and this week I answered the call
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she could walk away if she wants to. who knows? he maybe thinking about the same thing.
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It would be for the best, if they can see it that way
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Yup, that’s how it happens. You described this chillingly well.
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Thank you Dawn
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