New Year’s Day – a 100-word story

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Photo-prompt for Friday Fictioneers 23/05/2014 ©Erin Leary

 

New Year’s Day

Julie had glanced back from the pub door last night as she left to relieve the babysitter. Another round of New Year’s Eve kisses started.  Ed’s hand was on the mini-skirted bum of his friend’s sister, who responded willingly when he pulled her greedily towards him.

He would be home soon, full of ‘it was someone else’s fault’ excuses.

Outside, the winter sun seemed weak but it soon burned through the overnight fog.

The break-up would be tough on the children, and inevitably Ed would convince everyone that he was the victim.

But Julie’s nights of self-doubt and silent tears were over.

 

© Siobhán McNamara

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51 Responses to New Year’s Day – a 100-word story

  1. Good for Julie, just shake it of.

  2. Dear Siobhán,

    Good for Julie. It’s time for her to get on with her life, no matter what others think. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Siobahn,

    An apt title and a good story. The children will only be convinced for the short term. In the end, he’ll have no one to blame..and no one.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  4. Sounds like the right choice.. Ed seems to be a bastard.

  5. Another fog lifting piece like Rochelle’s, but this time she’s better off without him and that winter sun will hopefully bring her a happy and successful life. Nice piece! Well done 🙂

  6. The key is in the details – triumphant line, Ed convincing all he is the victim, that dark side of human nature.

  7. Sandra says:

    Good feeling of having turned a corner in her life I think. And what better time than New Year. Nicely done.

  8. wmqcolby says:

    Good characters here! Sad story and SO well-told. Bravo!

  9. But Julie’s nights of self-doubt and silent tears were over.
    Good for her. No more watching Ed’s hands on someone else’s bum and feeling like she’s not good enough! Well done.

  10. The change in perspective here as she leaves is really powerful, as we quickly realize the nature of her relationship with Ed. Well told.

  11. I like the way your title foreshadowed the story and the realistic way you told it. Her resolution came through loud and clear, something she’d been thinking already from the sound of it and this “little” incident was simply the last straw. Deftly done, Siobhan.

    janet

  12. elmowrites says:

    I like how you contrast the two characters, both in their actions and their endings. Sounds like it’s time for her to take this step. You make it clear that this isn’t his first offence.

  13. MrBinks says:

    An interesting take. “The fog lifting” I assume. Nicely done.

  14. New year, new life. Why not?

  15. Empowered and strong. A well told story

  16. There comes a tipping point, doesn’t there? Well done – a great read.

  17. atrm61 says:

    So happy that the fog lifted for her and new year really came in-hope she kicks that Ed to the other end of the world!A fantastic tale Siobhan 🙂

  18. elappleby says:

    A brilliantly written story – it seems she’s going to be a victim but ends up taking control of the situation. Realistic and powerful. Great stuff.

  19. Lucy says:

    Excellent. The first step is the hardest. Especially with kids. I used to wonder why a woman stayed with a certain man, why not leave him? Then, I was there. But, once you make up your mind there’s a great deal of relief. Well done, Lucy

  20. Shandra says:

    Go forth Julie, be Free & never look back.

  21. storydivamg says:

    May your character never lose her resolve. Good story.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  22. K.Z. says:

    very well-written. i’m happy for julie. who cares what others think… it’s her happiness, her freedom and her sanity that’s more important. 🙂

  23. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Siobhán, I love it! I think Ed is a stinker and he not only has roving eyes, but roving hands. I’m glad Julie has wised up! Well done! Nan 🙂

  24. draliman says:

    Sounds like Julie’ getting control of the situation.
    I like the sun burning through the fog, just like the fog in Julie’s mind has cleared and she sees the situation for what it is and she now knows what to do,
    Nice one!

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