My contribution to the 100-word story group Friday Fictioneers this week is a continuation of Kristina’s story from a few week’s back. If you missed it or want a reminder you can catch up here –
The prompt for this week is the photo below by ©DLovering
Friday Fictioneers prompt for 12/04/2014 ©DLovering
No Place to Hide
Kristina had never felt so conspicuous. She was pale as milk beside the black-haired locals with their tanned skin and bright, traditional clothes.
The Euros in the stolen wallet had helped her travel right across Europe, train-ride by train-ride. As she passed through each country, Kristina considered going to the US embassy. But she couldn’t betray her father. And what if they didn’t believe her and sent her home?
She turned away instinctively when the Policia drove past. Would her father have dared to report her as missing, knowing that she knew about the American?
‘Señorita,’ the café boss said impatiently. ‘To work, please. El Festival will soon begin.’
©Siobhan McNamara
Go, Kristina. This is a good continuation of her story.
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Thank you 🙂
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Nice continuation, Siobhan. It’s amazing how this has taken such form, in only 200 words! You’ve done a great job of bringing the characters and scene to life.
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Thank you 🙂
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just wondering if all the money was gone and she had to work now to survive. if that was the case, she might really be running out place to hide.
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She is working now, and thus in a situation where she is more likely to get asked unwelcome questions.
Thanks for reading 🙂
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The plot thickens! I’m enjoying the twists.
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Thank you, I’m glad you’re enjoying it 🙂
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An absorbing story! Hope this continues!
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Thank you Hala J, I think this story has more to come 🙂
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This is getting curiouser and curiouser….
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Thanks for reading 🙂
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Thanks Jim 🙂
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Sounds like she is absorbing into foreign soil–
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She sure is
Thanks Björn
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Dear Siobhán,
Intriguing.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle 🙂
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i wasn’t paying attention and blew by your intro, so I didn’t realize that was a continuation, but other than not knowing who the American was, I thought you did a good job of getting across her feelings. Maybe I’d better have some tea to jump-start my brain. 🙂
janet
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Thanks Janet, I was hoping it would carry as a stand alone.
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Loved it and the mystery which is yet to come!
Regards
Jim
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Well, her boss has no suspicions so there may well be a sequel.
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Yes, she ok where she is …. for now!
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Good continuation and also stood alone well. We’ll be waiting for the next story. Well written
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Thank you. I hadn’t planned on returning to this story but when I saw the picture I could see Kristina, sticking out like a sore (or very pale) thumb
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Am curious to learn more-Kristina is surely in trouble now that she is out of money and has to work.Enjoyed this continuation Siobhan 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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This is a really good, different take on the prompt and I like it. You have a wonderful suspenseful mind! Thanks! Nan 🙂
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Thank you Nan 🙂
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I didn’t realize it was a continuation either until I read the comments. I think it works as a stand alone, leaving just enough questions in the reader’s mind to have them begging for more.
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Good style writing there.
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Thank you 🙂
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